CHAPTER 1 PAGE 9

posted November 4th, 2014, 3:07 pm

where did she come from....... where will she go

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November 10th, 2014, 11:56 am

bruisewillow

Update News

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Unfortunately there will be no comic this week because we are installing a new computer and need to take some time to get everything all set up, but on the bright side once we get it all up and running we'll be able to make even more snazzy comics for you!

Luckily we won't be gone long, you can expect a regular update next Tuesday!!!

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November 5th, 2014, 8:33 am

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Well, that explains it - something you feel this bad about usually is your own choice. Can't find anyone else to blame, that makes it worse.

I think there's an extra "just" in the last bubble unless that's intentional. And I'm really not sure about second and third panel - not only they merge into a very short three-handed Alice but is this much emphasis on her gesture really necessary?

And while I'm being a mean nitpicky reader (I really do enjoy this comic but I tend to point out these things unless I know it's unwelcome) - you have a code showing up instead of the comic's title in the tab's title bar, I'm guessing it's a header gone wrong but you might want to check it out anyway.

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November 5th, 2014, 12:32 pm

bruisewillow

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@Oly-RRR: Hey! Thanks for reading the comic!

Thanks for pointing out the typo, I've fixed that. I'm not totally sure what's going on with the header but I'm going to figure out how to deal with that too!

Adding extra panels in between was to establish pacing. Alice has a lot of anxiety and talking can be hard for her, the pause there was her composing herself. I thought it was important to emphasize her trepidation and establishing that it took her a while to prepare herself does that.

Thanks again for your feedback!

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November 8th, 2014, 10:32 pm

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Love the rich and earthy colour palette!

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